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Finally... => Creative Projects => Topic started by: spümpkin on September 20, 2015, 11:21:57 pm

Title: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
Post by: spümpkin on September 20, 2015, 11:21:57 pm

I wrote this short story for school, and I decided to share it with you guys. I'm pretty proud of it.

Here is the story so far (https://docs.google.com/a/student.pakuranga.school.nz/document/d/1SjZKndg4vL8PcVWl8sVCgiiLaOcbCee3gZs9iQAl9mg/edit?usp=sharing)

I made it for a short story assignment, so it had to be 660 words at max, but I plan on expanding it. So in the expanded version, Ω won't die so quickly.

Give me any feedback you have, would love to hear what you guys think!

Title: Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
Post by: ShadowHammer on September 20, 2015, 11:34:26 pm

Sounds cool! But we need permission to access it. There should be a "share" button somewhere on your Google docs page, click that and set it to "anyone with link can view" or something like that. :P terrible explanation, but I'm sure you can figure it out.
Look forward to reading it!

Title: Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
Post by: spümpkin on September 21, 2015, 02:59:12 am

Oops! I dun goofed. Got that fixed now, thanks for pointing that out.

Title: Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
Post by: Generally me on September 21, 2015, 04:36:23 pm

Love it.

Title: Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
Post by: spümpkin on September 21, 2015, 10:54:19 pm

Thanks! Also, I updated it with a bit of extra stuff.

Title: Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
Post by: ShadowHammer on September 22, 2015, 05:09:51 pm

A mighty fine story you've got yourself there. Definitely more insightful than my short stories in school; "Bob the cow" was a commonly recurring character in those :P. But yeah, well written, I like how you implied that Ω was a robot without actually stating it; the ol' "show don't tell" as my LA teacher would say. Good theme, cool premise, overall great story!

Title: Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
Post by: spümpkin on September 22, 2015, 10:48:46 pm

Quote from: ShadowHammer on September 22, 2015, 05:09:51 pm

A mighty fine story you've got yourself there. Definitely more insightful than my short stories in school; "Bob the cow" was a commonly recurring character in those :P. But yeah, well written, I like how you implied that Ω was a robot without actually stating it; the ol' "show don't tell" as my LA teacher would say. Good theme, cool premise, overall great story!

Thanks for that! I'm planning to expand on it a lot more as well. I already have some more ideas, just when I can be bothered writing them.