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Finally... => Creative Projects => Topic started by: Scoops Novel on January 17, 2023, 08:56:41 pm

Title: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: Scoops Novel on January 17, 2023, 08:56:41 pm
I'm just trying to think of everything you can do with this.

Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: King Zultan on January 18, 2023, 03:08:23 am
So you're wanting to make a comedy act in prison, are we visiting or are we prisoners?
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: Scoops Novel on January 19, 2023, 01:49:35 pm
This is a script man!

Credit to eldave1:

"Funny premise IMO.


Someone being tazed is always good for a laugh

Maybe add a snippet where the comic tells a politically incorrect/anti-woke joke and gets an inexplicable boo from the prison audience - comic is REALLY???"

I'm imagining it in a Australian setting, but I could be convinced otherwise.
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: Scoops Novel on January 19, 2023, 03:04:17 pm
I guess I could have a net thrown over a prisoner... then he gets beaten up.
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: King Zultan on January 20, 2023, 02:20:15 am
So does that means the comic is a guard?
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: Scoops Novel on January 20, 2023, 01:50:28 pm
Visualize it man. Think like a skit, that's what we're building here. Everything in the scene exists to maximize funny. It just has to remain believable, because the situations inherently funny.
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: King Zultan on January 21, 2023, 02:18:21 am
because the situations inherently funny.
Not if your the one in prison.

Also are we a prison colony in space or something like Australia?
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: Scoops Novel on January 22, 2023, 06:22:03 am
As I said, I think Australia works the best. Muskets are funnier.
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: King Zultan on January 23, 2023, 03:13:49 am
So it's set in Australia back when it was a prison colony, okay I can work with that but wouldn't it make more since for this to be a comedy set in the prison rather than a standup comedian doing a show in the prison?
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: Scoops Novel on January 26, 2023, 10:09:36 pm
You've hit on the idea of the - idea of this being part of the joke. I do want it to be a comedy set in the prison colony, yes. A prison colony isn't really a prison exactly, it's a colony with too many guards. I imagined more or less at feeding time someone gets up and starts talking.

If the guy actually set up a standup event in his free time, it wouldn't be as funny. Just "tough crowd" vibes. If you're the first guy to dare telling a lot of jokes in peoples face in a prison colony, that's funny.
Title: Re: Crafting a Scene: Standup in a Prison Colony
Post by: King Zultan on January 27, 2023, 05:19:43 am
From what I remember of the Australian prison colony was that there weren't many guards and they just ditched people there so there wasn't a lunch time or anything to do comedy at.

So do we have this set in a group of prisoners or something?