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Finally... => Creative Projects => Topic started by: shadow_archmagi on March 12, 2009, 06:36:40 pm

Title: Short story I'm working on...
Post by: shadow_archmagi on March 12, 2009, 06:36:40 pm
Helpful criticism and praise welcome.

Spoiler (click to show/hide)

Yes, I'm aware it ends midsentence, I got cut off when the bell rang.
Title: Re: Short story I'm working on...
Post by: shadow_archmagi on March 13, 2009, 05:26:17 am
Hey! Don't think I don't see you, thirteen views! LEAVE COMMENTS!

EDIT: 29... GJEWJKADJGAJGHAUIEGEH
Title: Re: Short story I'm working on...
Post by: SirHoneyBadger on March 13, 2009, 05:49:37 am
I will tomorrow. Someday, soon, I hope (appologies, not feeling well, lately.)

From what I read so far, it looks good.

Wouldn't be fair to judge it in my current sorry state, however.
Title: Re: Short story I'm working on...
Post by: Little on March 15, 2009, 04:25:33 pm
Looks good.
Title: Re: Short story I'm working on...
Post by: Outcast Orange on January 18, 2010, 01:19:38 am
144 views.
3 comments.

: )

TL;DR.

That is what you wanted?
Title: Re: Short story I'm working on...
Post by: Os Q on January 18, 2010, 01:35:09 pm
So far, so good (I really like the opening in particular)