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Title: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on July 23, 2009, 05:25:34 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: sonerohi on July 23, 2009, 08:25:30 am
Moar plz. Easily continuable into an apocalypse story that is actually cool and good.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on July 24, 2009, 06:02:00 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Armok on July 24, 2009, 07:49:38 am
I would like to say something, but everything I can think of saying would just make your inferiority complex worse. >:D
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: sonerohi on July 24, 2009, 07:54:06 am
I like it very much. You convey a very good sense of a man who's gone mad in confinement, and it was rather twisty. Me likey. AFAIK, no big spelling errors or anything. It's a good story that you should keep writing.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on July 24, 2009, 08:01:38 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: ToonyMan on July 24, 2009, 12:51:16 pm
(http://i.treehugger.com/images/2007/10/24/agent%20smith.jpg)

"Me me me."

"Me too!"


Reminds me of Agent Smith.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on July 24, 2009, 07:09:04 pm
How so? Also, Hugo rules. This is a fact.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: ToonyMan on July 24, 2009, 07:58:21 pm
How so? Also, Hugo rules. This is a fact.

Blarg.  I would explain if I could.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 06, 2009, 10:24:37 pm
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.

Oh donkey bollocks, Vester quoted it.

I'll just stand here then. Hum tee tum tum.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Vester on August 07, 2009, 04:20:11 am
Another in the same vein, almost twice the length.

Spoiler: Quarantine (click to show/hide)

I find myself reminded of Stephen King. Do you read him?
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 07, 2009, 04:22:58 am
No, but when I was writing it, I remember thinking "I hope someone will say something about Steven King!".

So my dreams are rewarded. Maybe I should read him.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Vester on August 07, 2009, 04:31:22 am
No, but when I was writing it, I remember thinking "I hope someone will say something about Steven King!".

So my dreams are rewarded. Maybe I should read him.

 :D

Well, if you do start, try his short stories and novels from when he was younger. Those are mostly about monsters and ghosts and whatnot. Then move on to the newer ones, which tend to be about dimensions and Elder Things, and cars. Also he has some incredible stories like "The Shawshank Redemption" and "The Green Mile", which are made of pure win.

The reason I was reminded of him was because of the quarantine situation. He wrote a book called "The Stand" which started out about the same thing... then it all went to hell.

Your story is looking good so far, my only complaint is that some of your descriptive language comes off as dry.

My favorite part is how he notices her eyes are green.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 07, 2009, 04:33:24 am
Ah, constructive criticism, need more of this.

What about it was dry and how do you suggest I improve it?
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Vester on August 07, 2009, 04:48:47 am
Okay, umm...

"about six meters by six meters"
This isn't really necessary, since it breaks up how the sentence reads. Also, since it's not a plot point, how big the room is doesn't matter to the readers, I guess. Although it contributes a bit to the verisimilitude, I guess.

"dimmed, small and clinically white"
Too many adjectives attached to a single object also break up the flow, making it seem like someone is describing something rather than painting a picture. Sometimes it's better to put in a couple of details and let the reader do the rest with his mind.

Also there's a lot of commas, you could try breaking long sentences up.

That's all I can think of off the top of my head.

Feel free to ignore it, though  ;D
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 07, 2009, 05:33:44 am
Awesome, thank you, I'll remember that.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Vester on August 07, 2009, 05:40:16 am
Glad to help.

I'm a Lit major, reading stories is what I was born to do.  ;D
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 07, 2009, 08:02:11 am
Oh, I'm considering doing a Lit major. How is it? Also, would it help in my quest to become a respected journalist?
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Vester on August 07, 2009, 08:18:21 am
Oh, I'm considering doing a Lit major. How is it? Also, would it help in my quest to become a respected journalist?

Well, if you want to become a respected journalist, your first choice should probably be Journalism or Political Science, if they have them. Lit would be useful probably as a minor.

Lit as a major is massively interesting, but where I'm from it has this bad rep for being the course that people take to avoid Math.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Heron TSG on August 09, 2009, 10:44:12 pm
Crazy stuff. you should write a longer one.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 10, 2009, 03:48:56 am
Aw, you so sweet.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: sonerohi on August 11, 2009, 03:44:43 pm
Moar want.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 11, 2009, 06:51:04 pm
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: sonerohi on August 11, 2009, 10:38:17 pm
Jackrabbit, I think you have something here with these stories. They really are coherent and consistent, and I'd love to see someone (not you since you're going to be busy writing moar) make a game or video or some drawings of this. You might want to compile it all and talk to someone in the writing business.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 11, 2009, 11:29:38 pm
Jackrabbit, I think you have something here with these stories. They really are coherent and consistent, and I'd love to see someone (not you since you're going to be busy writing moar) make a game or video or some drawings of this. You might want to compile it all and talk to someone in the writing business.

You have no idea how much that means to me. I have an story idea kicking around but I since I'm going to be putting this one out on the interwebs, I don't think I'll try and publish it.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Vester on August 11, 2009, 11:40:16 pm
Out of curiosity, how do you write?

Do you go with an outline, and plot every meticulous detail, or do you just do it as you go along?
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 12, 2009, 02:07:02 am
That second one. Really, my only real experience with writing was my To Venture North story and that one requires me to be extremely flexible with the story, due to juggling several different sub-plots and whatever else the group throw at me (note to the group: It's really fun, don't stop doing it). For this one, I think, I'm going to get so far and then I'm going to have to plan, because whilst I have an idea of where I'm going I think that if I don't plan ahead I'm going to hit a brick wall.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Little on August 12, 2009, 02:17:04 am
As a fellow writer(except nobody bothers with my thread anymore and stopped caring a long time ago :-\), I really enjoy reading these. To Vester, I also use the second method, and only really use the first when it's something big. The quarantine story reminded me of The Stand as well, especially the bit where
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
is in the Plague Containment Center. Now all we need is a moulding bowl of soup ;D

You write well, and pictures to go along with these would be sweet.  :)
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Vester on August 12, 2009, 02:23:02 am
Well, an outline is a good idea for a long story. It helps keep things internally consistent, for one thing, because you can always refer to your outline to check what's already happened. Also, (and I find this is a problem whenever I write something without planning) if you think of something SO AWESOME IT HAS TO GO INTO THE STORY GHAGHAJG then you can set it aside and think of a proper place to put it - otherwise you might forget it.  ;D

@Little:
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
was so badass. I've yet to see an
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
who was so fun to read about and yet who I wanted to die every single chapter he was in.

Also:

I can do pictures! Terrible ones, but still!

If you want art, feel free to ask! :D
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 12, 2009, 02:23:43 am
Oh do, please!
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Little on August 12, 2009, 02:36:18 am
@Little:
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
was so badass. I've yet to see an
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
who was so fun to read about and yet who I wanted to die every single chapter he was in.

Fixed.

I actually thought
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
had the right idea about how to run society in a
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
world, if you made it much less draconian and war-based. Everybody had a job, and as it was noted, the power was back on far before winter. Course, you'd have to cut out the
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
stuff, but cut out that and
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
is right.

But that isn't what we are supposed to be discussing, as epic as The Stand is.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 12, 2009, 02:39:24 am
Man, I need to read that now.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: Vester on August 12, 2009, 02:46:09 am
@Little:
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
was so badass. I've yet to see an
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
who was so fun to read about and yet who I wanted to die every single chapter he was in.

Fixed.

I actually thought
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
had the right idea about how to run society in a
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
world, if you made it much less draconian and war-based. Everybody had a job, and as it was noted, the power was back on far before winter. Course, you'd have to cut out the
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
stuff, but cut out that and
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
is right.

But that isn't what we are supposed to be discussing, as epic as The Stand is.

Well, one last thing about Tha Stand: it also had the best deus ex machina, literally, I've ever seen. I mean,
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
is pretty hardcore in Desperation, but in The Stand he's all  :o .

Man, I need to read that now.

Stephen King's pretty good, is all.  ;D

I don't have my tablet with me, so I can't draw anything now, but I want to try my hand on Quarantine.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Little on August 12, 2009, 02:50:29 am
You have the uncut version, right?

The last chapter is such a fucking tease  ;D
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 12, 2009, 03:01:20 am
You have the uncut version, right?

The last chapter is such a fucking tease  ;D

Yup, in all its doorstopping glory

I couldn't help but want more
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
. Then I picked up the Dark Tower series. And lo and behold, there he is again.

ANYWAY we should stop talking about The Stand before this thread gets extremely derailed. Although I should have guessed you were a Stephen King fan from your RTD. :D
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Little on August 12, 2009, 03:12:23 am
Blaze and The Running Man are fucking great. It was another door-stopper, but it seemed to move more quickly than The Stand.

But back on topic.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 13, 2009, 07:23:52 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: sonerohi on August 13, 2009, 11:48:41 am
It's still a fucking badass story. I got bored at school yesterday and drew up the containment room he was in, but alas, I have no means to upload it at the moment.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 14, 2009, 06:00:19 am
Story's looking good so far.

Also, here you go. Is it bizarre enough?

Spoiler (click to show/hide)

I have no idea how the hell it ended up like this. I was mucking around in photoshop with paintbrushes and paintbuckets. I can't reproduce something like this, because I don't know how it ended up like this.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 14, 2009, 06:06:47 am
Whatever it is, it is God damn awesome.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 14, 2009, 07:31:22 am
Thanks.. It's supposed to be the confrontation with the freak doppleganger, only it came out all inky and black and white.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: TheNewerMartianEmperor on August 14, 2009, 11:36:05 am
It certainly underscores his insanity.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: sonerohi on August 14, 2009, 01:54:26 pm
Whatever it is, it is God damn awesome.
no. no it is not.

It is bad-fuckin-ass.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 16, 2009, 06:01:26 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 16, 2009, 06:10:46 am
It's good. :D

Some minor spelling errors, though. Also, I like Alex. ;D
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 16, 2009, 06:18:07 am
What? Mistakes with the spelling? Where, where?
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 16, 2009, 06:31:37 am
I'm no longer sure about the first one, but anyway:

Quote
His admittedly limited knowledge of weapons lead him to believe that
The past tense of lead is led, not lead (I think)

Quote
How you still alive without knowing what a Grody is
There's a 'be' missing there

Quote
Batchelor, 23, working on developing
Remove the 't' only. ;D

Quote
short sleave t-shirt and travelled

That's all I saw. Anyway they're really minor errors that I only noticed because I was reading slowly. It's a nice piece of work. :D
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 16, 2009, 06:36:01 am
Brilliant, thank you but for that second one, that's just how Alex speaks.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Heron TSG on August 16, 2009, 08:51:30 pm
Nice! Not only does the disease MELT PEOPLE, it makes them go crazy!

this could get
Spoiler (click to show/hide)
interesting.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 19, 2009, 03:42:51 am
Had to change a bit of the last update, it conflicted with some ideas I've had. See if you can spot the spoiler making change!
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 19, 2009, 04:40:37 am
It's morning instead of night?

...

That's not it, is it. Damn.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 19, 2009, 05:10:52 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 19, 2009, 06:45:03 am
A bit of nit picking, "We never had it on" sounds really weird to me. I can't image any one ever saying that, or at least, saying it like that. A good rephrase might be "We've never had it on" or "Whats the point" , though those don't sound that good either. But any way, a disease that melts people, then turns the survivors gay? :P Nice story so far Jack. His little hallucination speaks like the Gman, that's sort of how I'm picturing him :D
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: sonerohi on August 19, 2009, 06:50:28 am
It doesn't force them to be gay, but look at the situation. How many girls are in the army, and how many girls have zombie plans? How many guys for both of those?
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 19, 2009, 07:01:38 am
Okay, more will be explained, but the basic idea is that the near total destruction of humanity would make more people come out of the closet, because who's going to complain? Also, thanks for pointing that out, edited.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 19, 2009, 07:34:41 am
You should probably consolidate all the segments of the story into the original post, each in a separate spoilered section, that way they're all together.

...

Elevators are fine things.

EDIT: Can't wait to see what the ramifications of spending five years insane will be.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 19, 2009, 03:30:17 pm
I'll probably do that.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 20, 2009, 03:13:35 am
Oh I know, I was just joking about the disease turning them gay, part. Keep up the writing, eh? Its not bad.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 20, 2009, 03:54:11 am
Oh man, you had me really worried that everyone was going to misinterpret me.  :P
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 24, 2009, 07:08:43 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 24, 2009, 07:31:27 am
I enjoyed that, though I'm wondering how common these bunkers are. If something like this happened now, five years down the road survivors would be surprised to hear some one just stepped out of a bunker of any kind, and they would ask where it was to go loot it, I would guess. Everyone's responding to it like he said he just came back from the bathroom. Also, not that this is bad, during the whole thing I kept thinking "Where are they getting the bullets for these things?"
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 24, 2009, 07:31:48 am
Yay for update!

It does a very good job of establishing the world and the situation Cooper's in - and I find the idea that the jumpers use PK really fun. (No traceurs, though? :( )

Now to nitpick!

It's neatly put together. Here are a couple of proofreading corrections. ;D

"A prime example was his faced"
“But… I was a mile into… Grody territory. Why was their running lanes there?”
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 24, 2009, 08:55:46 am
I thought the same thing about the running lanes thing, Vester, but as far as I know, that's actually correct grammar. But, were actually is the correct thing to use, as far as I can tell.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 24, 2009, 04:42:41 pm
I could have sworn I fixed that before posting. And bunkers are fairly common. It'll make sense if I'm lucky.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 25, 2009, 06:20:34 pm

It does a very good job of establishing the world and the situation Cooper's in - and I find the idea that the jumpers use PK really fun. (No traceurs, though? :( )


GABADAWABADARAEG.

More proof I need to research things before hand. As if I needed any more.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 27, 2009, 06:58:44 am
Okidokie, first page updated.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 28, 2009, 03:57:46 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the VESTER DAMN YOU AND YOUR INTEREST IN SOMETHING I WISHED YOU TO BE INTERESTED IN IN THE FIRST PLACE.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 28, 2009, 04:10:53 am
Remember all that boring exposition you had to sit through?

But no longer.

Spoiler (click to show/hide)

It is good.

Although Cooper's thought process is a bit dry. Well, if it's read another way, he can be construed as numb due to, you know, the whole "death of billions" thing, but he seems an emotional guy, the type to freak out even further than he does currently.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 28, 2009, 04:13:26 am
Aha! Emotionality coming up!

Maybe we'll get to see Cooper explore his feminine side by playing with dolls!

Maybe that will never happen, ever.

Still, you're right, emotion must be added!
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 28, 2009, 04:16:49 am
But remember what Socrates said: "Nothing in excess."

This from the guy who was so excessively awesome that instead of executing him, they asked him to kill himself.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 28, 2009, 04:17:51 am
And what, they trusted him to do it?
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Cheeetar on August 28, 2009, 04:29:01 am
They basically gave him poison and said 'Drink this or we're kicking you out of the city'.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 28, 2009, 04:30:30 am
Uh. Socrates was a bit to attached to the place, methinks? I mean, if I was told I could:
a) DIEDIEDIEDIE
or
b) Leave the city forever
I would be forced, in my infinite wisdom, to choose the option that didn't leave me a corpse.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 28, 2009, 04:53:00 am
Actually, what happened was that the Athenian senate (I think) was convinced that he was a bit of a troublemaker. So they figured on punishing him for being wise and telling people that a well-examined life is a life worth living and all that, but he was popular, so they weren't just going to kill him. So they arrest him and put him on trial. The trial went badly, since they were already set on getting rid of him (Socrates said so himself during the trial). Then they told him to pick his punishment. They were expecting him to say, "banishment". Instead he said "Give me a mansion on top of a hill, and a lot of gold."

The common consensus is that he wanted to die.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 28, 2009, 04:53:56 am
Ha! A man after my own heart.

But there's a time and a place, seriously.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 28, 2009, 06:01:23 am
That was pretty good. I'm wondering why the ambushers expended so much ammo and showed so little general skill. You'd think after five years they would have learned a bit more, darn lepers. Keep writing Jack, good stuff so far eh? :D wot wot
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 28, 2009, 06:04:01 am
I say!

And that thing about people shooting to miss intentionally is actually fact. I read it on the internets, it must be true!
Addmitedly, TV tropes is not the most trusted source. But whatever. (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ATeamFiring)
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 28, 2009, 06:17:53 am
Ffffffffffffff- damnit jack! I just walked around TV tropes for a good 10 minutes there ,and its all your fault.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 28, 2009, 06:22:17 am
I am evil.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: sonerohi on August 28, 2009, 06:56:04 am
In the new one, you say "lucky basterds" when the leader was talking only to Cooper.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 28, 2009, 07:00:58 am
Sod, I honestly did see that and fix it. It's fixed in the non-frontpage version!
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 30, 2009, 03:44:37 am
Removed by the author. Paranoia cited as the cause.

Alright, leveling with you. Know how the first chapter was written for a competition? I'm basically doing this so I don't get called out on copying someone else's work. Sure I can prove it easily enough but this is even easier.

Just being practical in an over-the-top way.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: sonerohi on August 30, 2009, 09:55:51 am
Loved it.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 30, 2009, 04:30:09 pm
Sorry, I know it's off topic, but I love your avatar. It's so perfect for reviewing stuff.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 31, 2009, 01:48:00 am
I've had a revelation!

It came to me about four o'clock this morning. I woke up with the cat sleeping on most of my face. She must have only just got there because I can't sleep with a cat on my face, ever since I was a kid and had a nightmare about a cat sleeping on my face except it wasn't a nightmare and... but I digress.

Anyway, I woke up, shot upright, knocking the cat down the side of the bed (seriously) and decided, "hey! I'm actually going to try and get this published!".

So I will. Therefore updates will cease. I'm sure this will come as a shock to the... at last count three people who read this thread, but I'm sorry. It's something I very much want to do. Consider all the updates already done a sneak peek.

So in about two years if I'm seriously, stupidly, ridiculously lucky, expect to see this on the shelves!

EDIT: Also, just got the full, uncut version of The Stand!
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 31, 2009, 03:12:55 am
1. aaaaaaw
2. Good luck
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 31, 2009, 03:58:55 am
Yeah, good luck on getting it published.

Also good luck with The Stand. It's a megabeast of a book.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 31, 2009, 04:00:50 am
1325 pages.
A bit of light reading, wot?
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 31, 2009, 04:09:46 am
The stand.. Sounds familiar. Isn't that a Steven King book?
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Vester on August 31, 2009, 04:22:00 am
Yeah, this thread went off topic for a bit while Little and I discussed its awesomeness.

Rerailed handily thanks to an update.
Title: Re: Remember, a short story
Post by: sonerohi on August 31, 2009, 06:52:36 am
Jackrabbit, I think you have something here with these stories. They really are coherent and consistent, and I'd love to see someone (not you since you're going to be busy writing moar) make a game or video or some drawings of this. You might want to compile it all and talk to someone in the writing business.

*Ehrm* You had a revalation you say?
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Jackrabbit on August 31, 2009, 06:58:04 am
A revelation I have in fact been thinking of for some time.

So not really a revelation. I just wanted to fit the scene with the cat in somewhere. I swear it'll be the death of me.
Title: Re: Remember, a story
Post by: Mulch Diggums on August 31, 2009, 07:11:40 am
Righto, well, make sure it's good and long and have some professional editor people look it over, rather than us forumites! I won't be buying the book, cause I'm a cheap bastard mostly, but let me assure you that if it is on Bookchan, or at my library, I will read it :D