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On the wall is an engraving of colonial dwarves, a blue Dragoon and a red King. The Dragoon is striking a menacing pose. The King is cringing. The colonial dwarves are rejoicing.
Starcraft?
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This is a masterful image in ink on paper of a wolf and serpents. The serpents are striking a menacing pose. The wolf is laughing. The wolf is painting. The serpents are drunk. The serpents are withering away.
Hrmmm... Inherit The Earth? My memory of the game is kina fuzzy, but I think I remember something like that.
[ January 10, 2008: Message edited by: Impending Doom ]
On the wall is an engraving of a human, armor, and a giant spider. the human is wearing the armor. the human is striking down the spider. the spider is encased in ice.
On the wall is an engraving of a human and cake. The human is falling. The cake is laughing.
[ January 05, 2008: Message edited by: Impending Doom ]
Is it a Bay 12 Game?
EDIT: Ooh, I know, Liberal Crime Squad?
EDIT EDIT: This is an engraving of an orc and rats in dolomite. the rats are striking down the orc.
[ January 04, 2008: Message edited by: Impending Doom ]
[ January 04, 2008: Message edited by: Impending Doom ]
Alrighty:
On the wall is an engraving of a human and humans in Microline. the human is raising a crowbar. the humans are rejoicing.
Both of you, try to be a bit more civil.
If my Dune knowledge hasn't failed me, each and every segment of a Shai-Hulud has its own brain, heart, and digestive system.
[ April 19, 2008: Message edited by: Impending Doom ]
Other than that, I wholeheartedly approve of your version. Good work! 
The problem is, my speakers are swiss cheese at the moment, so I can't hear what the original sounds like. The tune I was writing it to is probably closer to "Uneasy Rider" than it is to the original "Ultimate Showdown."
I'll take your advice, and go ahead and make those corrections.
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Originally posted by LASD:
<STRONG>The "him, him" 3. and 4. line. Same word as a rhyme is always a bit tacky.</STRONG>
Actually, the rhyme is supposed to be the combined phrases "behind him" and "could find him"
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Originally posted by LASD:
<STRONG>The "appalled, fall", A bit too many words on the second line and the rhyme seems a bit off (It could be also that English isn't my native language)</STRONG>
how about if I change it to "so he pulled the lever that made them all fall"?
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Originally posted by Sean Mirrsen:
<STRONG>also, I have a minor gripe with the third line, it's 13 syllables while the next sounds like 14. Needs an extra something in there to be smoother.
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Actually, line 3 has 13 syllables, while line 4 has only 11. Perhaps "and then dragged him back down where nobody could find him"? that gives them roughly the same nymber of syllables.
