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Name [Ranged]: Call of the Deep
Description (Optional): Massive tentacles or limbs of immense aquatic horrors emerge from the inward edges of Outer Depths terrain, striking and lashing at all mechs other than the user.
SP Cost: 6

Call of the Deep has Range +1 for free and 3 other attributes, so its SP cost should be 4, not 6.

Targeting requirement: +2 successes/+4 dice, attack can only target areas of Outer Depths terrain.

You need to pick +2 successes or +4 dice, just to make it clear exactly what the bonus is.

The Outer Depths are allowed to flood into all areas within a 3x3 square around the user, causing affected areas to be counted as 'Outer Depths' terrain(Like Under Water, but Flight is ignored) for the next four turns(including the turn of use). Can only be used once per battle.

What do you mean by 3x3 square? The game isn't grid-based, so everything is based off of adjacencies between areas. Where you thinking of having this affect the current area and all surrounding ones? In that case it'd be something like 'flood all areas within Range 1', or something like that.

AP Cost is definitely 2 and the SP Cost should be 5, assuming that you're fine with flooding all areas in Range 1.

Name: Regrow
AP Cost: 1
SP Cost: 2?
Effects: Roll Support vs 0 or vs the Enemies Support depending on Target. Heals target by 2 for every DS, but target has -1 to a random Stat for the rest of the battle as the healed parts are replaced by incompatible eldritch flesh. Can't be used on undamaged targets.

This needs to be tweaked. -1 to a stat is too big to be a permanent debuff without being much harder to achieve, which runs into issues where it's easier to debuff allies as opposed to enemies with it. What are you trying to achieve with this action? East but double-edged healing? Marking enemies to get bonuses on them for later? Something else?

Other than that everything seems good to me. Anything else I can help with?

Actions:
Name: (use) Wide Feet
AP Cost: 1
SP Cost: 0
Augment: Trudge
Effect: Using its wide feet designed for mud and snow traversal this 'mech quickly moves through difficult terrain.

This shouldn't be an action, but a passive reducing Trudge's AP Cost by 1. Functionally the same, but Augments are for adjusting existing actions to give them more effects. Something like augmenting Attack to cost 1 less SP to use or Move to recover a bit of HP when using it. Stuff like that.

Low Profile: (Difficult Conditional?) Gains +2 successes defense when on Enclosed or Defensive terrain.

Definitely a difficult conditional.

Also you seem to be missing an extra trait for your mech. I count only three at the moment. One extra weapon and 2 extra passives.

Name: Andre Voclain
Mug: Working on It
Class: Fighter Trainee -> Pioneer -> Siege Engineer
Character Skill: Scout
Affinity: TBD

Personal Fault: Getting Old: -2 AS when below 50% HP.
Personal Skill: Medical Experience: Using the First Aid action heals 15 HP instead of 10.
/Personal Skill: Die on This Hill: If this character is within 3 spaces of 3 enemy units, +15 Evasion.
//Personal Skill: TBD
Preferred Stats: Skill, Defense

Weapon Profs: Axe (E) -> Axe (D), Hidden (D)

Total Level: 1
Level/Tier: 1

HP: 20 -> 30 (+0) (60% -> 120%)
STR: 6 (+0) (50%)
MAG: 0 (+0) (0%)
SKL: 2 (+2) (55%)
LCK: 1 (+0) (10%)
DEF: 3 (+0) (55%)
RES: 0 (+0) (10%)
SPD: 2 (+2) (60%)
CON: 6 (+0)
AID: 5
MOV: 4

Bio: The Aiel War changed Andre's life completely. As the first son to a pair of farmers his future was fixed on taking over the family farm as his parents grew older and no longer could tend to it properly. While the initial Aiel attacks were dismissed the savages quickly proved their worth in combat and Andre became one of many refugees fleeing from their forces. Wanting to be more than just a refugee he signed up to fight but, having little more than the clothes on his back, he was instead directed to construct ditches and build fortifications in a futile attempt to slow down the Aiel advance. For two years Cairhien forces bravely retreated with Andre doggedly keeping up, protecting himself with cast-off armour and wielding the same axe he used to cut trees. The retreat finally ended with the Battle of the Shining Walls outside of Tar Valon. For three bloody days the Grand Alliance fought with the Aiel until they broke the barbarians and pursued them back across the Spine of the World, at the cost of many lives and King Laman Damodred himself. Andre spent the battle busily reinforcing the approaches to Tar Valon in the likely case that Grand Alliance had to retreat to the city itself, thus sparing him from the terrible conflict.

The end of the Aiel War was not the end of the troubles in Cairhien however. Almost immediately after returning to their devastated lands the Great Houses of Cairhien  turned on each other in the Fourth War of Cairhienin Succession. Naturally Andre was swept up in the fighting as a veteran of the Aiel War and the ditches and embankments he built proved better against the Cairhienin than the Aiel. Even so House Damodred was deposed from the throne and once again Andre was forced to flee from his home country, this time for good.

The peace caused by the Grand Alliance did not last for long and experienced mercenaries were thus once more in demand. While not a talented warrior he had scavenged a full set of equipment and knew how to build simple defences quickly. Soon enough Andre caught the attention of Floro Tarsin, a noted mercenary and siege engineer. The skills and knowledge needed to conduct a proper siege of a castle or fortified position were great yet rarely needed and so Floro made a comfortable living travelling from conflict to conflict and offering his services to any who might need them. In Andre Floro found someone who was similarly fascinated by the craft and eager to dig and so the more experienced mercenary took the former farmer underneath his wing and taught him everything he could.

It has been many years since the Aiel War and Andre has since buried his mentor after a stray crossbow bolt took him in the eye, which has convinced him that it was time to think about retirement. His scarred body no longer moves as quickly as it once did and aches for longer after a busy day shovelling, but having few other skills he is not certain what else to do to support himself. So Andre still travels from conflict to conflict and offers his talents to the highest builder, though now he seeks safer positions and dreams of some future day when he can settle down properly. Penning a great treatise on siege engineering, just like Floro always wanted, would be ideal but Andre is well aware of his low status as a mercenary and would settle for opening a quiet shop somewhere free of conflict. Until then his shovel and axe are still available to anyone who can pay.