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"R-right. Do we know anything about the other exits?"

As soon as the group is safely through, Karin hangs back slightly, waiting for William and Astera to catch up, concern written all over her face.
"A-are you two alright? Y-you guys took a lttle long to get out..."

"S-sorry for c-coming in without asking, metal guy. W-we'll make it up to you somehow! I-I hope...."
C1, escape

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Alright, ladies and gents, it's time for the first audit of the sheets. I'll give you brief feedback here to tell you if your sheet's good to go or not and will primarily be focusing on PSes and backstories. If you want to follow up, please PM me here or on Discord. USEC_OFFICER's sheet is exempt after discussion on the Discord and so I won't look at it yet.

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Backstory good to go. After having given it some serious thought, Wide Lens is a no-go. I like the idea but I'm still very iffy on enabling PSes like this. Everything else is good.

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No glaring issues. You're good to go. Bonus points for coordinating other peeps too.

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Assuming you're still interested, this is very barebones and lacks anything for me to actually have a look at. Please finish this sheet.

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Good to go mechanically, but the backstory is immensely lacking. Outside of her having her parents killed and her going for the Demon Lord, I know very little about Sikora. Please expand her backstory; otherwise, you're good to go. Also, Oni are generally shy beings in this setting.

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Old Man Henderson is too thinly veiled an expy and this doesn't even do anything clever with the character you're flat-out ripping off. I understand I advertised this as a meme game but I expect some level of effort put into the fluff. Mechanically, your Personal Fault is far too severe and your first Personal Skill is very broad, given that this is a game about fighting the forces of the Demon Lord and by extension, the Demon Generals. This sheet needs a massive overhaul to be acceptable.

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You're good to go.

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Mechanically sound. The backstory, however, could use some expansion and/or overhauling. You're a Revivian who makes fun of the genre conventions.....except Revivians in and of themselves are already a parody of the very genre conventions you're parodying. You might want to rethink the concept or expand on it a little bit, do something a little more exciting with it. The backstory isn't unacceptable, just a little boring in comparison to the other Revivian sheets that do exactly the same thing you're doing but with their own twist or spin on the subject.

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As horrified as I am to say it, acceptable. Good lord help us all.

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Good to go.

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Good to go.

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I know about Vlad's backstory off discussion on Discord, so that's preemptively accepted. Just finish up mechanics and put something concrete down and you're good to go.

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Good to go.

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Good to go.

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Good to go.

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Good to go.

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Good to go.

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Good to go.

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Aside from some slight wording issues, good to go.

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Points for creatively weaving in the backstory, but this is basically just Dio. Tone it down a little bit even if I'd love to take him in as is. No mechanical issues that I can pick at here.

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Sound mechanically, but applying with literally just Ted isn't going to quite cut it in terms of backstory. Please make him less blatantly literally Ted, either by changing his backstory or making it a lot more subtle. Points for taste in good film, though.

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Good to go.

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Mechanically fine. As with blasbo and Tric, this is too blatantly meme-y in regards to backstory. Please overhaul your sheet or tone it down. As much as I'd also like to have him.

Alright, I believe that's everyone who hasn't got an excuse to escape the audit. There will be another audit of sheets shortly before selection. As I said before, if you want more detailed feedback, please PM me here or on Discord.

Attempt to block the incoming spear with one of the weapons. Use Gleipnir, summoning it around Pugilist 03 to stop 03 in their tracks while using another weapon to intercept 04's thrust and counter with a thrust into the chest with the dao.
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"Someone like you would have been handy a while ago."

"Big cave. Reaaaal big cave. Watch the little guy back there. Don't want him to get lost in this place."
Aya motions to Milos as she strolls down towards the end of the chamber. Then Joachim. A small grin grows on her face.
"You two best keep up then."
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