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The internet is pretty much a fundamental human right these days. How many work-hours are going to be lost because of false alarms and being kicked off? How much is this going to cost the ISPs to police the entire internet and cut off their own customers?

What a waste of resources. This is what happens when a few rich business leaders can whisper into the ears of the law-makers. The kicker is, doing all this won't improve their income at all. Stopping piracy does not = Increase sales.

Note: Don't leave all your recent files on Google server then get your net cut off for 10 days. Total nightmare.

Edit: Thanks Willfor, and zazazack for the PM. :)

Damn skilled drawing. Very atmospheric, captures the feeling of Dwarf Fortress well.

Quote from: Caz on April 20, 2012, 06:35:28 pm

I realise this is kinda late, but I did it anyway :< plz feedback and don't ask what I was smoking.

I like how you worked on getting a non-human (or even humanoid!) view, and I think, for the most part, you managed admirably.

My only issue really was with this bit of description:

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The torso of a woman, bare flesh, navel and sculpted breasts. The hair flew freely, golden, amidst two black antennae that waved in the air, as if tasting it. The limbs were insectoid, a thick carapace that ended in formidable thorns. The thorax was striped a gaudy yellow and black, and a stinger dripped with milky poison.

It just doesn't gibe with how you had the slimes describe things before, like you did with the bats:

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The cavern shook softly. The leather-wings nested in the caves, feasting on fruits of the cave-peach tree. Teeth that could shred a man right down to the bone, but nothing to a slime.

I think that the bit that really breaks the immersion for me is the "sculpted breasts". These are slimes which, as far as I can tell, are nothing more then amorphous blobs of protoplasm encased in a thicker membrane. How would something like that know what "sculpted breasts" (or, for that matter, "woman") would look like?

The ending also bothered me - you've squished two different ends together that shouldn't be able to coexist:
1) Our hero slime flees from the Beegirl, then hides in a crevice for a goodly time before coming out, small and weak from hunger.
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2) Our hero slime runs into the Beegirl again, but the two other slimes, mortally wounded, appear and save our hero.

If other slimes are so badly wounded, they should've died off a long time before the hero stopped hiding.

Alternatively, I'm misreading, and the "A crash and blinding light" is a hallucination brought on by the Beegirl killing the hero, and the hero grabbing the Orb is all just in the hero's head(-like protuberance) as its membrane dissolves.

Alternatively, I'm really off, and your use of (shim/zhe/zer) has completely befuddled me.

Wow. Never expected someone to reply to this. I agree with you about the perceptions of the beegirls being off. I think I was getting tired at that point and just wanted to finish the story without reworking it... pure laziness. There should probably have been a scene in the middle where the hero slime regains its strength, but slimes are pretty durable anyway as long as they can close their skin over the wound. Fire is their enemy.

Maybe it was a hallucination, who knows?   Re: shim/zhe I have no idea how to use inter-gender pronouns, so I just used all the things. They're probably made up too.

Thank you for the great insight!

Become the swarm.

Chicken fajitas. So much win.

Eat. EAT!

Posting to watch.

Also, if you're afraid of methanol, take a few shots of vodka. Seriously; the cure for methanol poisoning is ethanol, as it competitively inhibits the body's metabolisation of methanol into the far more toxic formaldehyde/formic acid.

Gotta love any solution that recommends imbibing more alcohol.


Mead generally takes months to settle down and be drinkable after bottling, if you want something faster beer is probably a better idea. Get a proper demijohn, airlock and sterilising tablets. If you don't want to mess around with giant bubbling pots full of wort you can always do extract brewing, not as good but cheap and easy.

Then again, I've made mead in milk bottles before and it was fine. Just got to be careful with sterilising everything and keeping it warm... my favourite place is in the cupboard of my room, or the airing/boiler cupboard. Nice and toasty for the yeast to have a party.