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Gamerlord

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A poem. Good or Bad?
« on: August 23, 2012, 06:24:19 am »

So I finally found my balls for long enough to actually put this up here. Tell me what you think.

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Re: A poem. Good or Bad?
« Reply #1 on: August 23, 2012, 09:41:30 am »

Very nice!
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Re: A poem. Good or Bad?
« Reply #2 on: August 23, 2012, 05:00:34 pm »

Actually its pretty nice, and its not very hard to get what you mean.
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Re: A poem. Good or Bad?
« Reply #3 on: August 23, 2012, 06:12:53 pm »

I say that you hit spot.
It's well written and well thought.
Nice impression it did make,
it resembles me Will Blake.

I love how you cross the verge,
how evil from good emerge.
So conclusion I have made,
it's wise as sage and sharp as blade.

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you may ask shaking your fist.
It is simple I would say
I just never can resist. 8)
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Re: A poem. Good or Bad?
« Reply #4 on: August 24, 2012, 04:21:00 am »

 Thanks!
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You sir, are awesome.

EDIT: Another one. Not quite as good as the other.

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« Last Edit: August 24, 2012, 05:30:00 am by Gamerlord »
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Re: A poem. Good or Bad?
« Reply #5 on: August 26, 2012, 08:15:12 am »

thanks :)
Second one is nice too, from technical standpoint, but I personally don't like love/relationship inspired poetry. I love when poems are talking about might, good and evil, what is right or wrong, madness etc. of which the first one is a prime example, or on the other hand when they are lighthearted and funny. Although as I said - it is just a personal thing and just an oppinion.
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Re: A poem. Good or Bad?
« Reply #6 on: August 28, 2012, 10:29:30 pm »

Both of them Are awesome, continue the good work.
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Re: A poem. Good or Bad?
« Reply #7 on: August 29, 2012, 03:16:08 am »

 :) Thanks!