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spümpkin

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Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
« on: September 20, 2015, 11:21:57 pm »

I wrote this short story for school, and I decided to share it with you guys. I'm pretty proud of it.

Here is the story so far

I made it for a short story assignment, so it had to be 660 words at max, but I plan on expanding it. So in the expanded version, Ω won't die so quickly.

Give me any feedback you have, would love to hear what you guys think!
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Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
« Reply #1 on: September 20, 2015, 11:34:26 pm »

Sounds cool! But we need permission to access it. There should be a "share" button somewhere on your Google docs page, click that and set it to "anyone with link can view" or something like that. :P terrible explanation, but I'm sure you can figure it out.
Look forward to reading it!
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Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
« Reply #2 on: September 21, 2015, 02:59:12 am »

Oops! I dun goofed. Got that fixed now, thanks for pointing that out.
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Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
« Reply #3 on: September 21, 2015, 04:36:23 pm »

Love it.
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Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
« Reply #4 on: September 21, 2015, 10:54:19 pm »

Thanks! Also, I updated it with a bit of extra stuff.
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in our own special way we are all shitpost
each day, when the sun shines and greets us with a smile, at least one of us finds that inner strength to spout bullshit on a forum revolving around the systemized slaughter of midgets
dont call me a shitposter, call me a spirit one with the shitpost atman
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Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
« Reply #5 on: September 22, 2015, 05:09:51 pm »

A mighty fine story you've got yourself there. Definitely more insightful than my short stories in school; "Bob the cow" was a commonly recurring character in those :P. But yeah, well written, I like how you implied that Ω was a robot without actually stating it; the ol' "show don't tell" as my LA teacher would say. Good theme, cool premise, overall great story!
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Re: Ω and the Apocalypse, A short story/regular length story
« Reply #6 on: September 22, 2015, 10:48:46 pm »

A mighty fine story you've got yourself there. Definitely more insightful than my short stories in school; "Bob the cow" was a commonly recurring character in those :P. But yeah, well written, I like how you implied that Ω was a robot without actually stating it; the ol' "show don't tell" as my LA teacher would say. Good theme, cool premise, overall great story!
Thanks for that! I'm planning to expand on it a lot more as well. I already have some more ideas, just when I can be bothered writing them.
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in our own special way we are all shitpost
each day, when the sun shines and greets us with a smile, at least one of us finds that inner strength to spout bullshit on a forum revolving around the systemized slaughter of midgets
dont call me a shitposter, call me a spirit one with the shitpost atman
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