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[Rockeater]

Lock pick, we could catch them by surprise

[Doomblade187]

Peer through, then lock pick if clear. Check for traps before entering.

[Kashyyk]

Peer through, then lock pick if clear. Check for traps before entering.

This.

Also, don't be disheartened Arx, you're still getting into the rhythm of things. I look forward to seeing this progress.

[Rockeater]

Peer through, then lock pick if clear. Check for traps before entering.

This.

Also, don't be disheartened Arx, you're still getting into the rhythm of things. I look forward to seeing this progress.

Yea, +1 on that

[Doomblade187]

Peer through, then lock pick if clear. Check for traps before entering.

This.

Also, don't be disheartened Arx, you're still getting into the rhythm of things. I look forward to seeing this progress.

Yea, +1 on that

Aye

[Roboson]

Peer through, then lock pick if clear. Check for traps before entering.

This.

Also, don't be disheartened Arx, you're still getting into the rhythm of things. I look forward to seeing this progress.

Yea, +1 on that

Aye

+1.

Art takes time, inspiration, and energy. About 90% of the time you'll get 2/3. Just how life goes. Looks really good so far, has certainly drawn me in *laugh track plays in the distance*.

[Egan_BW]

Check the window. Go down the alley and look there too. Be careful for traps in the alleyway, not just inside the building.

Best to be as thorough as possible before stepping in. Any alternative entrance we know about is an alternative exit, too. For the goblins and for ourselves.

[King Zultan]

Peer through, then lock pick if clear. Check for traps before entering.

This.

Also, don't be disheartened Arx, you're still getting into the rhythm of things. I look forward to seeing this progress.

Yea, +1 on that

Aye

+1.

Art takes time, inspiration, and energy. About 90% of the time you'll get 2/3. Just how life goes. Looks really good so far, has certainly drawn me in *laugh track plays in the distance*.

+1

[Arx]

Peer through, then lock pick if clear. Check for traps before entering.

Yea, +1 on that

Aye

+1.

+1

Check the window. Go down the alley and look there too. Be careful for traps in the alleyway, not just inside the building.

I should check around the back, first. Don't think the goblins will have done anything crazy, but you never know.



Well, nothing strange about this alley. That's a regular properly-boarded window, done from the inside. No traps on the street, unless you count that really narrow pavement I guess. That's a pedestrian hazard!



That's what I expected. Goblins could probably squeeze in and out through that hole if they're small enough. I wouldn't fit, though. I wonder if the door opens?



The handle's completely broken off. It has to be bolted or nailed shut from the inside. No getting in or out in a hurry here. Back around to the front!

Spoiler: Reminder how the front looks (click to show/hide)

I didn't hear anything while I was poking around, or see anything through the back, but I'll take a quick peek in here too.



Alright crew, we've verified something important! It's really dark in there. I can't really see a thing. I don't think anything's moving, though.

No pedestrians around, no police around... alright, Mel, brace yourself. It's time to break the law for the first time! The first time today, that is. Actually, hiding the knife under my skirt is probably against the law. Well, this is maybe more illegal.

Deftness: [3] +1 = 4



...aaaaand I got it. That took a while. Good thing no-one watched the whole thing, they would probably have wondered why it took so long to unlock a padlock. Time to see what's inside!

1.	> Pull out the wrench, shoot back the bolt and slam the door open!
2.	> Slip the bolt open quietly and try to get in silently.
3.	> Act natural! Open it up like you own the place.
4.	> _

Spoiler: Meta (click to show/hide)

We return! With another update that could easily be longer. Believe it or not, the streets take me much longer to draw than Mel, which is why these updates are a bit sparse. It took me longer to draw the first panel than to animate Mel picking the lock. Yeah.

Also here's the first animation! They'll probably be smoother in future, this represents a majestic 23 minutes or less of work. I want to try and work them in here and there where it's appropriate and possible. Don't expect a Castlevania fight scene pls tx.

And thanks for all the kind words. I have no intention of dropping this any time soon, but I might carry on moaning about my art when I feel like I've rushed it.

How much, if any, interest would there be in occasional snippets of world information? I'm not sure how to deliver them, but there is a little bit of environment, some of which is relevant to the story. I could include them as little bits of writing in another meta spoiler or whatever, but Mel's habit of expositing to no-one in particular feels forced enough without having her randomly explain why a Chinese girl is in a town using Arabic.

And while I'm asking questions, does anyone even read the meta spoilers could there be more text? Should I use illustrations for more interesting things? Are the images too big? Too small? How's the format feel, in general?

[Kashyyk]

I'm used to text adventures, so big blocks of text are fine. I'd be okay with the occasional lore dump. As voices in Mel's had we should know everything she does, and I'm sure she knows why a Chinese girl is casually breaking into buildings labelled in Arabic.

My phone can only show the first two thirds of the images by default, but I can just scroll sideways. Not actively checked how it looks on a computer.

Anyway, I think we should slip in quietly. There's no-one around, and we done want to alert the goblins.

[Doomblade187]

Sneak in, but only if we have a light source. We need to be able to see.

[Roboson]

Spoiler: Re:Meta (click to show/hide)

I think there are a few cool ways you could slip in some world info. A library or website would be cool. Or maybe if she goes to class or something that would be a good way. Even an Evangelical on the side of the road spreading their Creed could have world info mixed in.

For format, I think it's pretty freaking solid. Some more info heavy bits would likely merit a decently sized text block, but I'm more than fine with that. I really like lore. Picture size and layout is aye-okay as well.

+1 to sneaking

[~Neri]

We brought a flashlight, right?

[Egan_BW]

The best way to introduce world information is obviously for the narrator to be randomly distracted mid sentence and absent mindedly drop like two paragraphs of rambling background. Don't at me.

At this point you don't need us to tell you to be careful, right? Careful. Move in quietly, opening the door just a crack to check for tripwires and such.

[King Zultan]

The best way to introduce world information is obviously for the narrator to be randomly distracted mid sentence and absent mindedly drop like two paragraphs of rambling background. Don't at me.

At this point you don't need us to tell you to be careful, right? Careful. Move in quietly, opening the door just a crack to check for tripwires and such.

+1