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Re: McCreary's Planet
« Reply #555 on: March 12, 2020, 12:37:47 am »

Huh, so she got wind of our little vendetta then. I wonder, would it makes things better or worse to mention that Emma was against us going on that particular slaughter?

...probably worse. Possibly much worse.

"Entry Level Hydrogen Refinery Technician, Mother Nicole.  I hope to improve my abilities in science and physics through a relevant posting."

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« Reply #556 on: March 12, 2020, 01:06:49 am »

[-]"You could become a very practical scientist that way, Pheobe. It's a good selection." Mother Nicole nods, keeping eye contact with you. "Keep studying your translations...do more work with mathematics, meet a pretty young scientist who owes you a favor. SEED needs engineers, especially in the field of energy. More power means more growth, more done on the Great Work."

"Brother Hop says you've been reading the newspapers." She sighs, a frown twisting her lips as she looks away, at the map you've tossed hastily on your desk the night before. "When do you think we'll be at war?"

[10] You feel like this is a test, but more concerning is how she doesn't quite look at you, fixated on the map with a dull look in her eye.
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« Reply #557 on: March 12, 2020, 01:15:42 am »

Uh... beats me.

"I would expect within the next ten years, but we are already dealing with militant, desperate Outlanders attempting to push further inwards, seeking safety at any cost.  Thus, in some ways the war could be said to have already begun.  I agree that it is not a matter of if, but when."
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« Reply #558 on: March 12, 2020, 01:17:07 am »

"Soon. Years, maybe. Less. Something's not right, the outlanders know it, and it's all coming our way..."
"...but I expect you know more about that than I do. You look exhausted, grandmother."


Edit: Ach, I've been ninja'd!  :D
Ah-hm, I'll just steal a thing or two from that and revise... keep the tone, grab some details. Nice and knowledgeable and respectful-like.
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« Reply #559 on: March 12, 2020, 01:43:20 am »

(ahem, sorry)

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« Reply #560 on: March 12, 2020, 01:47:28 am »

(I saw that!  Now we should say that the war began when she was a child, to spook her with our prescience.)
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« Reply #561 on: March 12, 2020, 01:50:32 am »

...I've been waiting for someone to call it out. Just saying. Powers are only placed when direct mention is made of them and they are tested.

"I was supposed to arrive yesterday, darling, but someone or ... more likely, something, shot down the hovercraft that makes its way through the regions, picking up passengers and dropping them off here and there. All told, two hundred people died, thirty of these were Crusaders." Mother Nicole traces her fingers on the map, on the defensive lines. "Shot it down, right in our territory. We sent a platoon to recover it and any survivors-- when they got to the crash site, a swarm of [insects] were there to meet them. The platoon unequipped to deal with them, only managed to confirm our fears before being killed in action. An after-action report also reported lost contact with one of the camps on the way into the wasteland." A finger hovers over Defensive Region number five, as she explains.

"Scouts reported all dead. So, not only is our enemy able to project great force into one of our most defended regions, but they also secured a hover-craft."

"[the plague] infects machines just the same as it does people. Not only that, but it can also replicate and learn from technology it is given."

Mother Nicole does look tired, "Did you know that there's only one battalion of anti-aircraft in the Crusader's army? It's currently stationed in the Holy City. The Elders refuse to move it to protect, say...the Refinery, our primary source of fuel. But they have a point-- if we move it, [the plague] could infect our God, if they don't, we could be crippled."

"Suffice to say, our industrial machine is working as fast as it can to protect from this threat, but new factories have to be built, debt-slaves moved, overseers and skilled workers transferred in. It's quite a mess." A wry smile twists her way over her face, "Steelworks Nine managed to secure the contract, as well as one for a new weapons plant. Some good, eh?"

"Dear, I hate to say this, but the war started long before you walked into my office. It started when I was your age." Mother Nicole reaches over, giving your hand a gentle squeeze, a morose look on her face, "It sounds like you had a good life planned."



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Re: McCreary's Planet
« Reply #562 on: March 12, 2020, 01:53:39 am »

"I... I did. I do."
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« Reply #563 on: March 12, 2020, 01:55:53 am »

"I... I did. I do."

How about that, plus:

"Is this a resurgence of the earlier plague, or an entirely new plague?  I thought you destroyed it, so many years ago.  Regardless, this just means that you need to augment your industrial complex more than ever.  As you said, you will need engineers to weather the storm."
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« Reply #564 on: March 12, 2020, 02:05:42 am »

Good sentiment. Just needs a bit of emotion.

"I... I did. I do."

"Is this a resurgence of the earlier plague, or an entirely new plague?  I thought you destroyed it, so many years ago.  Regardless, this just means that you need to augment your industrial complex more than ever.  As you said, you will need engineers to weather the storm."

Say this, but put some feeling into it. Break it up, give Mother Nicole chances to respond in kind-- make an argument of it. Find out what's expected of us. Find out what sort of a life we can still build for ourself.
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« Reply #565 on: March 12, 2020, 02:09:31 am »

Good sentiment. Just needs a bit of emotion.

"I... I did. I do."

"Is this a resurgence of the earlier plague, or an entirely new plague?  I thought you destroyed it, so many years ago.  Regardless, this just means that you need to augment your industrial complex more than ever.  As you said, you will need engineers to weather the storm."

Say this, but put some feeling into it. Break it up, give Mother Nicole chances to respond in kind-- make an argument of it. Find out what's expected of us. Find out what sort of a life we can still build for ourself.
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« Reply #566 on: March 12, 2020, 02:44:48 am »

"I...I did... I DO!" The voices in your head fade into a low murmur as you stand, shouting at Mother Nicole and slapping her hand away. You feel anger boiling up as you lay into her with a savage growl, "Didn't you take care of this, Black Nicky, or was that a lie too?"

[9] Brother Hop steps forward, between the two of you, and you shoot him the darkest glare you can muster. To your credit, he flinches, but doesn't back down, a stoic scowl across his face as he shields Mother Nicole from your wrath. To her credit, Mother Nicole doesn't flinch, watching you with mild annoyance.

[-] "Stand your sorry ass down, Tyler-- don't you dare intervene. If she kills me, then we're fucked anyway. No need to kill the damn failsafe too." She barks at the soldier, who, gives you one dark glare, and moves away. "Better yet, leave me alone with my grandchild and get out of here before you piss her off more."

You stare at her, breathing hard, feeling the pressure of the plas-pistol reactor on your table starting to fluctuate with your mood. The display begins to scramble, and Mother Nicole gives it a sideways glance. She doesn't seem surprised or concerned, more interested in it than anything. But she doesn't speak, and you're left standing there, staring her down for far too long.
You begin to almost feel silly, but that doesn't help the roaring beast in your blood.

"I will provide Emma a posting far away from the fighting. Far enough away that even if the Holy City falls, she will live a good life. She will be with the top members of her field, learning from some of the best. If everyone dies, she will survive. I'll burn every last city myself to ensure that, dear, if you care about her this much."

[1]Her words only anger you more. She wants to use Emma as a hostage. She doesn't blink as you snatch up the plas-pistol and grip it tightly in your hand. You feel the reactor hum to life, the safety shorting out in a small burst of sparks.

"As for you, I intend to make you the next McCreary, but I can't do that with a damn technician! I hope you'll live through it, but death is the only certainty of life." It feels right, don't save them, your finger slipping into the trigger guard. Your first instinct is a dark thought indeed, you hand twitching before you restrain yourself. She holds your hands on it, leaning forward to look you in the eye.

"So, will you fight for the thing you love or cling desperately to the hope that one day everything will be okay? Will you live your entire life in a shadow or step into the light and seek redemption?" Mother Nicole quotes the SEED Holy Book, a Scripture for the Outcast, and the Outlanders. She speaks softly, looking less like a towering figure of her Crusader past but more and more like an old woman, seeking help. You realize you're pressing the las-pistol hard against her chest, hard enough to leave a mark through her robe. She doesn't state the third option, but something else does.

Emma is of questionable morals-- she would still love us. She'd love us even more if you took her away from all this. Pull the trigger on Black Nicky. Pull the trigger on Brother Hop. Leave. Never come back. They'll be too distracted in the west to look for us...we could have freedom...and if the plague comes for us, we'll destroy that too. A different voice than the rest bubbles through your consciousness, one urging blood and battle. It burns your brain like fire. Its right though, isn't it? Apparently this is the only way you can solve your problems in this hellhole, the only way these morons understand that this is  your life.


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« Reply #567 on: March 12, 2020, 02:50:38 am »

Holy cow.

Abort abort abort

Drop the las-pistol to the floor and sit down. We are Phoebe Gainer, and we threw our lot in with Emma so we could leave this kind of inhumanity behind.
"my old name... wants me... back"
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« Reply #568 on: March 12, 2020, 02:51:40 am »

Holy cow.

Abort abort abort

Drop the las-pistol to the floor and sit down.
+1 and try to calm down.  Decisions made in anger are rarely wise.  Don't listen to the gold voice.
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« Reply #569 on: March 12, 2020, 03:04:51 am »

Y͔̦o̭̝̖̹͝u̻̬̦͔̠̖̟͟ ͓̠d͉̯̮̖̰͞o͓̕n'̬̖t̢͕̙͚ͅ ̪͚̦̤̜̱w͔̰̟̻̘ạ̭̯n̲̩t̝̩̜͜ ͇̥̳̜͎̥w̸͉̺̞h̷ạ̗̝̖t̴̖̻̰̘̩̗͕'s̢̳̜ ̲̞͠b҉̳e̢̯̣̦̙s̜͟t͔̰̙ ̼̮͚̠͉͜f͉̝o̖̼̰͉r̟͙̱ ̜̀ṃe̶,̯̩̗͚̟ ̮̝̫͇̹̜y̘͘o̧u̪̜͞ ͙͙̘̗̭̱̺w̦̝̭̻̩a̫͉̭̹̥̼n̙̦͕̼̰̺͖t̳̟̺͔̜͢ͅ ͖̤̘̬̘͇wh̜̠͉̱a͉͚̼̗͟ͅt̨̯͓̺̩̤'̗̳̘̺̥s ̵͍̣̱͙̰͔̯be̡s̸̱͎͕̥̗̥t͍̟̼̀ ̥̳̗̯̫͓̕f̡̬̪̞ơ̞̼̗̪̘r͇̲̕ ̳͕̣̘̰y̺͈̩͖̖̻̞o̳̩̬̰͚͢u̶̫!̮̠̝͎͇̀ͅͅ ̘̣͙̳̘̖͙I̝̻̥̯̫͎ͅ ̤͜n̛̲͕̠̥̥̯̺e̷̮̟̹͈̖̼̝v͔̰e̲̬͞r̳̞̭̯̜ ̨̜̝̬̻̠t̰͇͍̳̲̥o̵̯̦l͓̜̳̕e͇̣̭͓r̹̠̘̘̤a̡̫ţ̟̥͉̱͖̤̩e̯̻͚̤̫̫d̲̬̲̤ ̷͖͓̝y̱̯̭͔̪̮ò̫̱̪ṳ̮̣r̷̳̻̠͖͍̮͉ ̗̤̕e͇̞͙͖̗ͅx̖͎̺͉̘͓͓͞i̺͕̰s̞̬͟t͚̗̰͚̳̫͞e͕̤͇̦̦̣n̸̲͚͙̣c̹͙̖͔̮̱̱͢e̲̣̳͖͕͓,҉̖̩ ̴̺͍͈͈̩̺a̦̕n̵̟d͕ ̺̩t͉̹̥h̢͕̣͉̖͚i̛̯̝̠̹͙̝̯s͎̺͚̥̲̗͚̀ ̙̱͎̹̲̱i̮̼̝̹̪͎͟s ̵̬̘̫͚̗͍̩w͡h̻͖̱̺̝̹̺y̩̙0͉̥͉̖̱̱͘0͎͠ ̢̠y҉̖ơ̼̫͉͚̬̱̳u̬̟̮̦̫ ̘̻̞t̡̻̮̮̼̣̙u͏͇͔͔̙r͏̳ne̮̺̟̖͎̱ͅd҉̹̠͕ ͇͔͇̮̘̖̺͜m̸e̵ ̩̦͇͈͕͚͙i̢̬̩̟̯͓̞͎n͘to̞̠̺͓͟ ̡̯a̮̘̺͎ ̵̫̙th̶̹͎̣̬r̼̪̝i̝̭̩̩̩̲̭͜c̡̗͖ͅeͅ-̲͎̹̖̟ͅd̵̝a͍̦m̦̞̯̗͉̦̝͠n͙͍e̶̥d͖ ̮̤͔͈͇́h̹̹̪̫͟um͇ͅa̢nͅ.̖̜̝͉ ̗͞I̪͠ ̦̪̰̩̬̹̩a͎ͅṃ̠̥͙͕̦̟ s̩̠̣͎͙̤̯͘o̧͚̩̼̲̖̝ ͕͖͓̖͖͡m̳u̮̥͕͎̱͙͙c̹͎͉͙͖̠̮h̻͚͉͡ͅͅ ̸̟̤̭͕ḿ͚̩̼ͅò̺r͇̦͔̲̞e̝͙͉̜̻̲.̛ The voice rages and your grip on the pistol tightens, standing \ over a worried-looking Mother Nicole. Your lungs tighten as you try to choke out words to her. The voice becomes quieter than the other two, the two that worry, that caution. One speaks softly, and one commands. The other rages and screams incoherently. It levels accusation and falsehood, like a child throwing a tantrum.

[17] "Dear--" Emma's voice calls out from the hallway, cutting off your grandmothe-- your grandmother. Nicole Gainer. S̶h̗̰̼̫̞̤̯́e̜͖̝̫͚00 ͏͙̦̖̠i̥̲͈͝s͓͔͎̀n҉̺̯̩̹͇͚'t͉ ̘̯̩̭̥ͅt͎h̲̪̕o̷u̬̮͖͇͙̩̣g̳̪h̻,͓̘͔͚̲͚ ́ș̬̟̖̟̰h̫̰e̢̠̞͔̥̣͈'̮̦̝̝͈s̩̹ ͎̫̬͉̦j̱̮̣͚̤͓ú̲st ̩̗͇̭͔̩u̱̮͙̱̦s̼̫̮̱ìͅn̛g̟̰̻ ͚͉͓ỳ̲͈̥ou̠̖͕̞̭ ͕͎̜̯͈̦́l̡̫̺̺̭̙̗ḭ̲͎̳͉͜ḳ̝̻̼̖͚̪e̤͘ ̶͓̺̘a̸ ̫̻ͅw̸̪̳̜e̖̳͚̥̰a̙̰̼̻͢p̨̹͉̹͇̙o̼̤̥̪͚̮̹n̮̣͚͎͘ ̲̼͎̻̕j̧̰͈̣̦u̴̗͈ͅs̞t̥̮͎̫͕͇͔ ̡̪͚̰̙̲͕̰li͍̗̤͓͍̫̝k̺͚̤e̢͚̮̰̪ ̼̣̲eṿẹ̷̖͎̮̖r͓̩̀y̟̙͈̘o̥̣̜̩͈̹n̻̼̩͟e̡̞̹̮ ͞e̛̦l̹͞s̭̖̟̕e̲͔̲͚͡00 ͉͔͙͠d̞̦̼͕͔͙͇o̴e̠͢s̰̺̜͔̯,̠͇͇͜ ̝̱̪̲̜͕̕t̘̥͟ͅo̫̻͎̰͞ ͏f͚̣i͢g̸͉͕͍͎h̘͔͍̩̝̻̤t͎̳̻̠͔̗ ̠h͡e̶̯͇͖̪r҉͉͕̤̜͎ͅ ̲͕̼̼̙̜p̷̱̪͙͔̲͔e̢̝̮t̛͎̜͚̱͎̺̳t͈̥y̻̯͎͖̩̗͟ͅ ̰͎͉̖̬w͉̲̯͈̱á̼͖̪̜̖ͅr̨ ̧o̼v̼͍̫͉͖͝e̱̱̮̻ͅr̞̬̙̬̳̯ ̸a ̠̠̬̞̮̕p̠̦͍̻̭̫͇͢a̗̲̣͚̖̮̳t̫̠̗̖ͅh͔͓̪̕e̹t̬̟̦̥̬ͅi̳̣͕̮̬̩̼c̟̭̻͇ͅ ̱̞͎̞̳͚w̕o͎͓͔̜͍̦r̙̗̩̬̯̕l̰͓͙̲͝d̥̳͚̼̹͝.̘͎͎̲͢ ͇͍͖͢B͕̠u̱͔͉̼͔ͅŕ͇n̬͞ ̱̖i͉̜̳̤͔t̟͖.̧̬͚̙ ̞̫̰B̰͡u͔͉r͉̩̲̖͍͓͢n͜ he͙̹͓͔̠̱͢r̜͉.

Your hand trembles. Why is she so loud.
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