There are some awkward phrases here and there, to wit:
"The rebels broke up several minor troops sent against them, and they began to be rumored, with new volunteers joining them." should probably be "The rebels broke up several minor forces sent against them, and as they began gain fame, new volunteers joined them."
"They will be the sown seed that will sprout warped flowers." I don't know why, but the word "sown" sticks out for me. just "the seed" is fine.
"I am Morug Noseless - declares the tribe's leader. - Morug and his troops kneel before the War Lady." should be "I am Morug the Noseless - declares the tribe's leader. Morug and his troops kneel before the War Lady."
" Its members have performed several minor commissions for us." "commissions" should just be "missions". They are not artists
similarly "They were commissioned by intermediaries and have no idea who they work for." "commissioned" should be "employed".
finally, in the same event they call "War Lady" "the Crypt of Darkness", I don't know if this is indented, but I didn't think so.
"Such big wolves, very toothy." Should be something like "They are big wolves, with big teeth."
in the resolution, "They can't tame it. " should be "They can't be tamed."
"Instead of knobs, he has two black holes" should be "Instead of eyeballs, he has two black holes". "knob" is slang for the male reproductive organ.
the rest of the sentence is no better " Instead of knobs, he has two black holes - no, it's not that his eyes have been gouged out. Its eye sockets are bottomless voids, resembling a starless sky." should be " Instead of eyeballs he has two black holes - it's not that his eyes have been gouged out, rather his eye sockets are bottomless voids, resembling a starless sky."
Also," You reach for your gun" I thought this was medieval fantasy?
"The monks fight fiercely with swords and spears but are overwhelmed by the overwhelming force." has the word "overwhelming" twice. maybe say "defeated by the overwhelming force."?
a formation called a "wall of shields" is just called "
shieldwall"
"I can't do anything, or don't want to do, with it." should be "I can't, or won't, do anything with it"
"I will lewave it alone." should be "I will leave it alone."
"especially since your powers will not diminish without it." should be "especially since your powers will diminish without it." (since your magic power decreases from that choice.)
"TYour mental tentacles penetrate the minds of the inhabitants of the Kingdom of People" should be "Your mental tentacles penetrate the minds of the inhabitants of the Kingdom of People"
"Admittedly, they also have their weaknesses, such as sensitivity to the sun, but there is something for something." should be "Admittedly, they also have their weaknesses, such as sensitivity to the sun, but everyone has a weakness." or something similar.
"Will you try to make order with Garil before he becomes too dangerous?" should be "Will you try to take care of with Garil before he becomes too dangerous?" unless you meant "make peace"?
"I cannot or does not want to take any action." should be "I cannot or do not want to take any action."
"Unfortunately, the captured captives turn out to be dark, stupid villagers. " should be "Unfortunately, the captured prisoners turn out to be dumb, stupid villagers. "
Also, it says "But he is not dead who can rest for centuries" even if you pick female.
Sometimes, I'm not sure what triggers it, polish text for relations between kingdoms appears beneath the English text for the same.
And sometimes the link with the words "Zapisz grę" appears, but does nothing. (saving the game discolors both links.)
After that, I had no more choices (is this by design?) and finally the screen just went blank before the first battle.
and again (during my second play-through)
Success in Daeron's attack sets dwarven strength to -1, instead of adjusting it by 1.
I don't know if this is a bug, but having the king of men on your side does not increase your power.
My second play-through also ended with a blank screen, this time in a different place- before the ice people battle.
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Topic: "Dark Reign" - text simulator of the Lord of Darkness (Read 1693 times)