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Author Topic: A DF-inspired story  (Read 776 times)

SolarShado

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A DF-inspired story
« on: September 25, 2009, 06:44:07 pm »

Spoiler: Part One (click to show/hide)
Spoiler: Part Two (click to show/hide)
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Lord Dakoth

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Re: A DF-inspired story
« Reply #1 on: September 26, 2009, 09:52:23 pm »

Your writing flows well, but I think you could use a little more introductory text. Good job, though. Lord Dakoth approves.

Now be a friend and check out my short story here!
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Booze, booze, the Dwarven drink.
Clears me mind and helps me think.
In the bedrooms, in the hall,
The ever-sweet scent of alcohol.

SolarShado

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Re: A DF-inspired story
« Reply #2 on: September 27, 2009, 12:12:21 am »

I rarely do any writing, especially stories. I always have trouble with the beginnings and endings.
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Re: A DF-inspired story
« Reply #3 on: September 27, 2009, 11:51:37 am »

Nice.
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