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lordnincompoop

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Here's some fiction for you guys to tear apart.
« on: May 23, 2010, 03:56:45 pm »

Some random fiction I wrote some time ago. Just thought you guys would like it, what with all the killing and all. Discuss. Critique.

It's supposed to be similar to a fairytale, and it does have a moral.

Spoiler: The Fiction (click to show/hide)
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Re: Here's some fiction for you guys to tear apart.
« Reply #1 on: May 26, 2010, 10:43:21 am »

Really? Am I that bad?  :o
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Re: Here's some fiction for you guys to tear apart.
« Reply #2 on: May 26, 2010, 10:45:00 am »

what with all the killing and all.

What? When? Where?
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Re: Here's some fiction for you guys to tear apart.
« Reply #3 on: May 26, 2010, 11:48:03 am »

I just think that most people do not try to read long stories too often. Give them a time.

It was an interesting read, it looks like a fairy tales which teach children not to be too cruel and minimalistic, but not to forget about their duties at the same time :).
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Re: Here's some fiction for you guys to tear apart.
« Reply #4 on: May 26, 2010, 05:58:14 pm »

What I got from it:

Extremes are bad. Travel the middle path.

But that could just as easily be what I brought to the table as a reader.
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Re: Here's some fiction for you guys to tear apart.
« Reply #5 on: May 27, 2010, 02:38:24 am »

The established norms were established because they work. They might not be fine-tuned and they might not give full freedom.

but by-golly they are there to make the most important things happen.
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