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WhiskerMeister

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Pablumistic Phantasmagoria
« on: September 02, 2010, 03:35:25 pm »

a story i wrote for you, bay12.

Chapter One.
light and dark, sun and moon, changing shifting shapes surrounded me. i knew what it was and what it meant but i was afraid to act. i couldn't. her beautiful face had driven me so very mad, the ever present threat of loss served as my motivator. i needed to do something, i knew that i needed to act. standing idly by would not help either cause. and so i did it. i swore to myself i would do it.

colors and spirals and lights! i had to press on. i ignored the vehement opposition and the stalwart crowds. i diffused the naysayers and sought only vindication. righteous judgment and eternal suffering, internal confusion rife with obtrusions. i battled and ignored, i fell for their ploy but refused to surrender. it was my hope for salvation that pushed me further, ever further past my original goals. i needed reassurance yet my disparate pleading and yearning lead to naught but despair and disgust.

my view forever rejected, dismissed by all. my internal convictions lamented, my principles invalidated. i had neither strength nor will to continue, beaten aback by stoic, uncaring monstrosities. their wise words made me weary, they confirmed the undesirable truth. i ignored these cries and pledged to forget, but memory is not one so easily coerced. the seeds of doubt had been planted, seeds of enlightenment gestating, and so i had lost it all. the path to redemption was visible before me, a path rife with strife, ravaged, one not voyaged by me before. it was an unknown, a perplexity, i was offered a chance and a decision was forced upon me.

would i take it?

Chapter One end.

maybe more later you guys if you guys think it's as rad as i think it is.
« Last Edit: September 02, 2010, 08:00:25 pm by WhiskerMeister »
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Huesoo

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Re: Pablumistic Phantasmagoria
« Reply #1 on: September 02, 2010, 04:46:57 pm »

I think its fucking amazing man, do your thing.  8)
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Re: Pablumistic Phantasmagoria
« Reply #2 on: September 02, 2010, 08:03:37 pm »

Not bad, though I'm wondering about the title.

If it's pablum, why are you writing it?
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WhiskerMeister

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Re: Pablumistic Phantasmagoria
« Reply #3 on: September 02, 2010, 08:08:19 pm »

Not bad, though I'm wondering about the title.

If it's pablum, why are you writing it?
pablumistic wasn't actually a word to my utter dismay (probably because pablum works just as well as an adjective 'that pablum argument' etc) so i sought to remedy this. beyond that i felt compelled to write, i guess? plus the alliteration made me warm and fuzzy inside.
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Re: Pablumistic Phantasmagoria
« Reply #4 on: September 02, 2010, 08:21:00 pm »

^_^;;

Okay.  Well, good luck to you.
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Re: Pablumistic Phantasmagoria
« Reply #5 on: September 06, 2010, 11:34:43 am »

Bump in case not abandoned.
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