For the length of the story and the amount of detail put into it, you did a great job. You put enough detail into it to allow the reader to assume the correct occurrences, avoiding the need to repeat names and objects to give the story a better flow.
I did expect one of Ceda's travelers to die at some point. Instead everything seemed to have a picture perfect happy ending. I did hope that Ceda would fall further into darkness... which did not occur. Everything seemed end up fine, and I felt the climax was hampered because of this.
I think the major issue is that the story could of been much much longer with the amount of travel and detail put into it. It seemed like there was parts cut out.
Overall, I do think it is the best work done you have done Threetoe. Keep up the nice work.
Ill add any more comments later if I can think of anything else.